Both of our heads turned to each other. I felt shocked that such an assumption could be made, while Vala...well, she couldn't stop smiling. "We're...uh hum...we're not dating. She's a...a..."
"An acquaintance?" Vala interjected, winking at me.
"No, not that...," I answered, lost in thought. The perfect excuse formed itself in my mind, something that would even explain the bruises on her face without complicating me in her problems. "I'm her...psychologist. She has a lot of issues, and 'm taking her out tonight, you know, just to let her feel normal again, and to have some fun."
"Oh...right...," Vala seemed taken by surprise, but quickly expanded on the lie. "Yeah, I've had a rough relationship in the past. My boyfriend was abusive and all that...but doctor Jackson here, he's been a great help to me."
"You're preaching to the choir, sister," the bartender sighed. "I had the same experience a couple months ago. Boyfriend's in jail, luckily."
Vala put her acting skills to good use, nearly bursting into tears. "Mine got away with it... He's probably out there somewhere, beating up another girl like he did me..."
"That's enough talking about bad past experiences...," I signaled the girl to discontinue speaking to Vala. The fake act had to come to an end sometime.
"You're so good to me, Daniel," she sniffed, eyeing the worker, and spoke only when she knew that the girl was away at a safe distance. "I didn't know you could think on your feet like that," she whispered. |
The bar scene was hilarious!!! Daniel really make a funny drunk person! :P
ReplyDeleteOoh, I really like the way you slipped into 3rd person there. Especially with the explanation about what Vala did for Daniel. It's very nice to see the good side of her, which make me love her even more now! :D
~Calista Smith
Oh, and I cannot wait to read your new story! Have you figured out a name for the main character yet? I saw her on facebook and she's beautiful!
DeleteYou have your Facebook back now?
DeleteHe sure does! It's the exact opposite of his usual, composed self.
DeleteI kind of prefer writing in that manner, because that's the way I started out three years ago at a forum. It's hard slipping back into it, but I'm trying, so I might write generation 5 like that.
I'll try my very best to NOT make you hate her in the future. ^_^
Thanks so much for commenting, Molly!
Awe, she actually cares!! :'D
ReplyDeleteThis as great chapter. I want to read more soon.
BRING ON THE CHAPTERS!! :D
~Hailey~
(aka Dawn)
Behind all the layers of her craziness, yup. :D
DeleteThank you for your comment, Dawn, and I've just started on the next chapter, so hopefully, the next post will be out this week.
It's funny how Daniel was intoxicated by alcohol and passed out because just yesterday we were learning about Drugs and Alcohol!
ReplyDeleteI seriously loved the theme of this chapter by switching between 1st/3rd person, I think!
Anyway, I really hope Vala and Daniel get together, I really do!!
Also, I was wondering if you re-activated your Facebook?
Ooh, what subject was that? We learned about that stuff in the past in Life Orientation. The most boring subject ever. -_-
DeleteI'm leaning towards those two getting together... And thanks!
I have, but I should explain further: I de-activated and activated it a lot, because I was really indecisive. So if you check my profile, you'll see I posted stuff, and then...I subsequently de-activated.
Don't worry, that weird time has passed, and it'll be remaining activated until I probably stop writing!
It was Drugs and Alcohol :))
DeleteOkay, Thanks for telling me :)
Ha ha, Danny standing on the bar. Ooh, and Darcy's face when Daniel yelled at Vala was funny. Her eyes were so wide. um... I don't have a Facebook, so I don't know hat the character looks like. I'm gonna throw out the name Violet or some other flower name just cause, even though I haven't seen her. Anyway I loved the post, and had a good laugh.
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Yeah...he was really REALLY drunk. ^_^ Haha, she's quite dramatic, especially when it comes to facial expressions.
Delete*sigh* It's times like these that I regret deleting my tumblr, but I seriously don't have time to keep that updated as well.
Thanks for commenting, and enjoy your day!
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